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Post by CoKeS on Mar 20, 2005 0:37:53 GMT -5
this is a poem I wrote a couple of minutes ago, and it was one of my first attempts of writing one that somewhat rhymes, so I wanna know what everyone thinks of it, enjoy....
I see you walking down the street, kicking up dust with your lazy feet A lot of people see you coming, and they’re quick to get out of your way Before you start something, a tantrum, or a fit, whatever it is, everyone Knows that you’re a bitch, but I’ve had enough of this boring game, everyday Is exactly the same, and you’re on the winning team, holding the trophy high And pointing your pistols up towards the sky, you pull the trigger with ease, Always dangling the prize right in front of us, like some sort of tease, it makes Me happy knowing that we’ll never be friends, so don’t blame me if I don’t catch On to your foolish trends, I’d rather live in complete disarray than listen to Anything you have to say
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Post by Evycakes on Mar 20, 2005 5:25:58 GMT -5
that was great .... i write stuff too .. most people dont get it .. but it means alot to me .. and it helps to let out your emotions .. good job .. woot woot
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Post by rivalhools on Mar 20, 2005 8:45:46 GMT -5
i'm not quite sure about it, it's hard for me to understand it as it's not very 'poem shaped' and as you don't use punctuation (no criticism, that's normal, i know) i hardly understand it.
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Post by Castro on Mar 20, 2005 10:08:16 GMT -5
sounds pretty cool but i've never been big on poems or lyrics
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Post by nastia on Mar 20, 2005 14:15:45 GMT -5
very nice. i like it
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Post by soniktruth on Mar 20, 2005 14:22:41 GMT -5
i like it, i'm gonna dedicate it to my ex-bitch
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Post by CoKeS on Mar 20, 2005 21:03:17 GMT -5
thanks for all the feedback everyone, I really appreciate it.
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